Haibun to me seems like regular writing with more detail, and description like where Stephen Leslie writes "Lacking social grace, she constantly interrupts my conversations with firm but clear directions." It lets you picture what is going on in your mind more than a haiku. I also think the sentences or lines flow better from one sentence to the next, like a haiku. The amount that is written is longer, and it seems more personal, since the writer often used words like "I" like when he wrote lines like "For the rest of the day I drove around with his body."
He stares at me with his giant almond-shaped eyes, as if he is trying to see through me. I stare back at him, the gold in his eyes shining as the light hits it. I decide to walk away, and he follows, the patter of his paws telling me I had a follower. I turn around to catch him in the act, and he stops, turning his head and looking out the window to act as if he was never following me in the first place. I smile at him, and keep on walking.
Followed by a friend,
Who seems to be my shadow.
He is always close.
1/10 Speaker= ****
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